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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 12:34 pm 
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i would say the 9th would be a good date

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 7:25 pm 
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Can there be one character, named Bryce Carlisle?
I don't know if I'd actually do anything interesting with that, but could it be done?

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 10:03 pm 
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The 9th is fine, after that we can start discussion.

And it'll work better if you have two characters - especially if you've not written much in the past - but if you really have to then okay I guess.


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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 8:25 am 
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So I guess it's the ninth then fellas, start postin that shit if you've got it.


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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 9:05 am 
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Hahah, yeah, it's about midnight here for me, so I'll get one done in the morning.


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PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 9:46 am 
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is carlisle a girl

im gonna push somethin out if carlisle is a girl

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 12:03 pm 
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Got most of one done but then I had to move and forgot about it

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
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i have mine done but it's really bad and aaaah ;-;

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but

discussion and critique is the whole point of this thread

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 2:48 pm 
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Are we allowed to critique even if we didn't write anything?

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 4:17 pm 
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Guess I'll start things off? 1473 words so it's light reading.

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The Divine Fool

The theater was dark, save for a single center spotlight focused on the stage. Its crimson curtains were drawn back to reveal props for the medieval play to come in the morning. But it was the midnight hour. The doors were locked, the people gone, and all the lights turned off. Except for one.

Footsteps echoed in the theater as two people walked from opposite ends of the stage to stand in the harsh light.

One was a tall man comfortably in adulthood, dressed in a snappish suit that would be at home in the upper echelons of business. And every piece of it was a varying shade of grey. He had little facial hair to speak of other than the barest vestiges of stubble. Slate eyes contrasted sharply with white skin. Not pale or tan, but purest white devoid of color and blemish that shone under the single light.

The other was a woman, or possibly a girl. Her age was not as clear as the man's. She wore a long, flowing black dress that reflected no light. Instead it appeared more as a patch of pure darkness that just happened to adorn this woman. A light layer of makeup, every color and more in strange designs, accentuated her face without it being garish or clownlike. Her eyes were also not of mortality; pure silver pools that reflected everything with perfect clarity.

The two regarded each other briefly before they gave slow nods. "Carlisle," said the man. "We have been friends and enemies alike for many years. And that is the only reason I accepted your request tonight, on the eve of the final confrontation. Although," he looked around the stage. "You have chosen a rather curious place. Is it because you feel nostalgic?"

"The days I lived on a stage are long past, Bryce," said Carlisle. "For the both of us. I called you here to make one final plea."

"My answer has not, will not, and indeed could not change," said Bryce. "Tomorrow we will meet. We will fight. And I will die. The power you gained by allying with Samuel is not one I could hope to surmount."

"So you would rush headlong into death then," said Carlisle. "Little knowing of what lays on the other side for our kind."

Bryce shrugged. "I have written death many times, sent many who did not deserve it into the grave. What right do I have to be afraid? It is the only place forbidden to us while we live, out of this entire reality. Shouldn't I be anxious, possibly even curious to see what unseen depths remain?"

“A fool's response,” said Carlisle. “Death should never be embraced. Not while we can stand above it.”

Bryce snorted. “You persist in thinking our kind immortal when we age, we grow weak, and we die. We can extend the first two, but the third is inevitable for all things save the Muses and Heart itself.”

“Samuel works to end both.”

“Samuel is insane. I always find it a wonder that our power can never be taken or lost, only given away. Were they linked to the state of our minds, existence would not be in nearly as horrid shape.” Bryce sighed. “But instead the decision is left up to us. I should think that when we can no longer wield it with any effect, we should not possess it any longer.”

“You spew the words of a fool endlessly as ever, Bryce,” said Carlisle. She walked to the edge of the stage. “We stand atop all things, write the stories of existence, and can live forever and ever if we so choose. Why would anyone give that up willingly?”

Bryce gave a wry grin. “Because they already know the certainty of their end, and elected to put their faith in a chance for hope.”

Carlisle froze, slowly working through the words. She turned her head to fix Bryce with one eye from her position on the edge of the stage. “What...did you say?” she whispered in a horrified hush, like one who could not believe the taboo that had just been uttered.

Bryce smiled openly. “Look at me, Carlisle,” he said, arms open. “Look at me completely and see what a divine fool does.”

Carlisle turned around and fixed Bryce with a penetrating gaze. Her silver eyes rippled as they pierced through flesh and bone to gaze upon what lay beyond. The realm of souls and spirits, auras and power. Their kind dominated it with their mere presence, an omnipresent beacon of brilliance in whatever world they stood in. Carlisle's own aura blanketed the realm this stage stood in.

Bryce had no such aura. Not even the smallest flicker of life emanated from him as an ordinary man would hold. His essence had been completely and utterly excised, leaving nothing but the physical behind. Soulless some would call him.

Carlisle twitched. And she screamed. “WHY?” reverberated in the theater, shaking loose dust from the rafters.

Bryce stuck a finger in his ear and rotated it. “Would you mind speaking up a little?” he said, inspecting the amber prize on his finger as he pulled it out. “I don't think the next planet caught that.”

Carlisle's colorful face was dominated by crimson and her words became a constant stream of insults and obscenity.

Bryce just continued to smile. “Don't worry,” he said. “It's in good hands. I expect that he may even become greater than you, and possibly even Samuel. You'll meet him eventually.”

Carlisle stopped her tirade and took huge, heavy breaths. “You are most definitely a fool. A fool's fool,” she said with barely suppressed rage. “When did you do this...this...this ATROCITY?”

“Before I came here,” said Bryce, displaying his palms in a placating manner. “I suspect I will have to find an inn for the night since I can't leave this world under my own power now. But rest assured, I will be there to meet you in combat tomorrow.”

“I'll kill you,” said Carlisle, red tingeing the silver of her eyes. “And then I will hunt down the one you gave your power to and CRUSH that so-called hope of yours!”

Bryce just smiled. “Oh? Knowing how many characters I've written, you intend to embark on a crusade against them all? You would surely die of old age before you even got through a tenth.”

Carlisle hissed and spit like an angry cat. “I will find a way Bryce. You want to run headlong into death? Then tomorrow I will grant your request. But I will not make it painless and I will not make it quick. If you come to me I swear by whatever Power may reside above us that I will show no mercy.”

“I expected no less,” said Bryce. “Then I will see you on the morrow.”

Carlisle swept her hand and her shadow, thrown against a cardboard wall by the single light, reshaped itself into a black doorway. She stepped up to it and turned to Bryce. “Just remember,” she whispered softly. “You asked for this.” She walked through the shadow and it vanished after her.

Bryce sighed and turned to the side of the stage. He raised his hand up to shield from the light and squinted. “So, how much of that did you catch?”

“All of it,” said a figure cloaked in the shadows of the stage. “Are you sure this is how you want your story to end, Bryce?”

Bryce walked out of the spotlight and towards the figure. With every step he became less defined as he was swallowed by the darkness. “Aye old friend,” he said. “You won't talk me out of it?”

The figure shook its head. “As much as it saddens me, it is not my story to choose.” He looked out over the stage. “I wonder why she chose this meeting place.”

Bryce smiled. “Because this is where we first met. As star-crossed lovers in a play long since forgotten.” He clapped his hands together. “But enough of that. This is to be my last night of living, and I intend to make the most of it.”

The figure laughed. “I know just the place.” He gestured out and a silver doorway appeared in midair. “But if you don't mind my asking, what was the play called?”

Bryce stepped up to the doorway. “The Divine Fool,” he said and walked through. The figure followed after and the aperture vanished.

Behind them, the single spotlight burned out and the darkness was absolute on the silent stage once more.

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2011 4:34 pm 
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You can expect me to post a piece o' whatsit tomorrow or the day after. Just don't expect it to be dark and edgy, though- usually I don't write pieces like that.

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
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Alright, Imma give this a shot. Hopefully be done by tommorow

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Sat Sep 10, 2011 1:38 am 
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Myk wrote:
is carlisle a girl

im gonna push somethin out if carlisle is a girl


I'm pretty sure she is, Myk.
She is now.

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 Post subject: Re: Writing Classes with Uncle Spoony
PostPosted: Sat Sep 10, 2011 5:55 am 
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I love this thread so much. Can't wait for the finish of this one and the start of another assignment.

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