AWKWARD ZOMBIE

A lot of that first paragraph is kind of awkward. The ideas are fairly clear, but, especially in the first few sentences, they're structured sort of weird. For example, "All the work that the now dead creator slaved over for years on end was shattered as the cutlass stabbed and sliced the master-craft clothes that he wore." The master-craft clothes could be read as being worn by the long dead creator instead of the old man. Also, at the end of that paragraph, "fragile and brittle" seems a little redundant.

I like the rest of it, though. I'd be interested to find out how the situation came to that.